05-18-2010, 09:51 PM
Tutorial Mansion:
The tutorial mansion is really well done with lots of clear explanations and examples!
16099 - In BBB, it's not really a question, how about:
...on second thought: I've noticed that Jack's
That's a bit more consistent with the other messages in the tutorial.
Also:
16103 - without thinking I got impatient for the for the platform and attempted a
16306 - BBB edit:
16291 - Moving platform flickers while Jack pulls the lever. (also posted in General Discussion)
16097 - BBB edit, how about:
16098 - BBB edit, how about:
The tutorial mansion is really well done with lots of clear explanations and examples!
16099 - In BBB, it's not really a question, how about:
Hmmm, does this platform go into the next room?Jack wonders.
...on second thought: I've noticed that Jack's
internal thoughtshave mostly vanished from the various messages in the tutorial, which I think works better anyway. In keeping with that, you might consider leaving it as:
It looks like this platform might go into the next room. Pull the lever to find out!
That's a bit more consistent with the other messages in the tutorial.
Also:
re-appeardoesn't need the dash. It should be reappear.
re-enteris fine with or without the dash.
16103 - without thinking I got impatient for the for the platform and attempted a
bottom ladder jump(with a half twist) and died. Whoops! Well, the fix is definitely in.
16306 - BBB edit:
alikeisn't really necessary, and doesn't really add anything, either. Consider dropping it.
16291 - Moving platform flickers while Jack pulls the lever. (also posted in General Discussion)
16097 - BBB edit, how about:
...However if the conveyor belt moves the opposite direction Jack is going...
16098 - BBB edit, how about:
You're now ready to learn the new features in Midnight Mansion 2: The Haunted Hills.